|Originally posted by optik |
WIP 136bpm trance
it needs something.. maybe structurally.. or maybe it needs less..
certainly intro needs a lot of work
anyway crits appreciated
Pleasant uplifting prog.
A bit dynamically squished for my taste. I'm not really a fan of what the loudness war does to tunes and the effect it has on the dynamic range is quite visible in a meter and audible when you turn it up. You can hear how stuffy and compressed it is at high volume.
Why does the intro need more work in your opinion? Seems like a pretty standard intro. Seems like enough room to mix in from a previous track. Sometimes, less is more.
Chord prog. at 1:31 is nice, bass plays along well here. Like the intricate accents that happen around 2:05, could maybe use more of this in the first breakdown to open up some space. The instruments are well chosen and fit well together. The melody is nice...
A bit mixed on the release into the main theme at 2:47. It works of course, but it just feels very matter of fact. Could maybe use a little more flavor, possibly a split second before the tune kicks back in at 2:50 or slightly more put into the release. It is the main theme that it's leading into.
Like the interplay between the overdriven saw and piano at the main theme, and they're leveled nicely here. Quite a nice mix of melody and harmony here. Energy at 3.20 is good.
Why the removal of the kick at at 3:32? Absolutely kills the energy before the breakdown even happens. Release felt a bit weak at 3:45 due to this I think.
Also not sure what to make of the faux break-down that follows it at 4:14. This is the point where I felt a bit pulled out of the track. The flow felt kinda broken here as I was expecting an actual break-down with some added interest, rather than quick rehash. It works, but didn't seem to really add as much to the tune. (except for 40 more seconds)
Overall good work though, I enjoyed it. Nice tune. gl with it.
Last edited by theterran on Jun-22-2014 at 06:37