|Originally posted by theterran |
Like the vibe overall, pretty energetic / atomospheric, and it's a nice kind of different. Sound selection is good, and everything works well together. Vocal snippets are placed well, and are interesting.
Kick seems to be lacking some punch / drive though. It sounds alright at first, but gets lost in the mix I think. Since this seems like more of a beat driven track, that might be worth looking into.
Might consider doing some more panning / filtering work with that whooshy noise, or duck it a few db, to blend it in with the drumkit a little more.
Will note that I was listening passively to the mix, and then actively when I felt pulled out or distracted.
I thought the track actually ended at 4:00, and was pulled out of the vibe there. Even tabbed back to hit pause so SC didn't continue on down the random playlist it typically does and realized it was only 1/2 done. Gotta be somethin' there, 10 seconds of silence is a bit much.
Personal preference : I was hoping for some sorta distinct melodic hook / theme, something light and passive, but still memorable. Could theme it off of the vocal sections that fade in around 5:15, or something to accent the ambience. Could use any variety of instruments for it in this mix too. I just don't think the bassline is interesting enough to hold the beat, supporting vocal snippets and atmosphere together for the entire 9 minutes. If nothing springs to mind, or is inspired, then I wouldn't worry about it.
If you're interested, I have the 133 bpm snippet of what my brain was trying to fill in the void with...it's a simple, drone-y, backdrop harmony but, it might spark some ideas if that's something you'd like to toy around with.
Like you said, it's not worth it to force things in a song though. I feel it's usually pretty apparent to the listener...and it tends to be a detriment to the song more often than not.
Good job overall though, I liked it.
Thanks for listening! Glad you liked parts of it at least. I am aware of that this kind of track isnít for everyone.
Bass: I have had tremendous problems with making kick/bass work. And I am still not sure about it, but it will have to do, there are new compositions waiting to be made, so canít work on this forever =)
And Iím glad evo liked it. Thatís the danger with giving/receiving tips, you never know what kind of preferences the person giving itís input have, so something that is ok for one, need to be changed for another. This is of course obvious, but easy to forget when you put stuff up for criticism, and very important to bear in mind. I actually think it can be very dangerous to search criticism too early in the processÖ
Mark Twain wrote something in the lines as: Donít send me your stuff and ask me whether itís good or not. The risk is that I donít like it because of my personal preferences and turn it down, and something that would have been deeply appreciated by the public will never see the light of day. The artist must always, in one way, "stand alone".
About the silence in the break. I know that it is a little risky, but silence can actually be a really great effect under the right circumstances, and it serves a purpose for the continuation of the build up. I also look at it in a bigger context, like in a set, and in a ďliveĒ setting. I think that it could be really goodÖI hope so anyway. But thanks for helping out! Appreciated.
About melody. As you said this one is more about the beat and the atmosphere, so donít want any apparent melody in it. Sometimes I just like it when itís more driving, hypnotic, than obvious.
Btw, I was listening to your track again, and that piano melody at the end is beautiful. What kind of piano did you use?
Last edited by fuxzz on Dec-21-2017 at 10:19